Aku Chi Chapter 1 Page 10

So now we are back to that girl from the beginning the one that passed out This manga is really annoying me, you got good art, good panel execution but its like you are trying to tell two stories at the same time. It would be like if naruto went back and forth between sasuke and naruto every 3-4 pages while randomly throwing in a character. Not sure why she would throw her stuff on the ground in shock, especially since her face doesnt look shocked. If she was scared you should try those extra lines you draw around her body to resemble trembling. Overall i like the background in this page too. Would of been better to see her from a distance with a shot of her place just to understand what building shes entering, cuz picky readers like me notice these things and wonder